Finally, for an essay: focus on precision statements and don't waffle. Here is an example of a section of a sample essay that could be improved:
I suggest fewer words and more precision:
Write the essay with essay writing skills in mind; put the evidence within perspectives as relevant, always answer the title so that here the evidence in perspectives defines and explains the sociological concept of illness as it relates to class.
This resource at http://www.pluralist.co.uk and go to Learning - Social Science - Issues and Critical Theory - Illness and Class.
1) The Concept of Illness
2) Specifically within Sociology
3) Define and Explain
4) with some Historical Insight
5) using its Relationship to Class
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Haralambos, M., Holborn, M. (2004), Sociology: Themes and Perspectives, sixth edition, London: HarperCollins, 292-298.
Socialist Wealth Association (2013), 'Black Report' [Report of the Working Group on Inequalities in Health], originally published by the British Government Department for Health and Social Security, 1980, [Online], Available World Wide Web, URL:http://www.sochealth.co.uk/public-health-and-wellbeing/poverty-and-inequality/the-black-report-1980/. [Accessed:Monday August 19 2013, 19:12].